BTW nice name for a character and hope that doesn't happen to me on my prom and it's only a month away!!

It's pretty personal, but here's where I get critical (sorry haha, I'm a creative prose writer myself, so I give more critique than a constructive critique): I'm not sure if this is about your life (hopefully it's not), but supposedly it's an account of an emo girl being picked on and she cannot endure all that criticism anymore and wants to give up. But I have to say this piece…is still a little superficial where anybody could write the same thing? You know what I mean? Apart from the mom being drunk and the dad wanting to do the little sister.

To really hook the reader, you should make it more personal, like your thought process before you decided to cut yourself, what you're thinking while you cut it (like…am I going to regret this? etc…) But I guess you wanted to start the scene off in media res (in the middle of action), so that's another literary technique I liked.

The writing itself is alright, but could be more artsy (Sorry, I am going too much into creative writing now, you don't have to read this part) but some sentences you can….spiff up more.

Like…"I picked up the knife and I slowly cut across my wrist." Instead of that, you can either put your feelings into it. Maybe you're trembling and hesitant to do it. Maybe you are so eager and confident that you simply slash it through your wrist and watch blood spew out all over the bathroom mirror, with beads of blood sliding down into the sink. ahah just a little something.

Sorry for all the criticism. It's a good piece overall, to write at leisure. But could add some creative touch to it (if you like creative writing).

Edit: after reading others' responses, I guess I wasn't looking at the big picture. I normally dissect pieces too much I forget the reason why one would write something. Yes, it's a tragic story. Tragic, yet beautiful.
heh I used to be kinda emo…so I understand these things.